COMMENTS ARE NEEDED PLEASE . FOR IMPROVEMENT .yaya

It’s a neat story start with an interesting character. I especially like the makeup strategy she’s employing there. The typos are a little distracting, as is the lack of spacing. I think you have good content here that just needs a little cleaning up (which you can do with the ‘edit story’ option, so you don’t have to delete a whole ficlet)

I like this story, it is very confusing with the spelling and grammar mistakes, if you work on that I think this story has some potential.

hows this?

i love the subject of it. too many girls thinkin they aren’t pretty.