Wow…this is the first time I’ve actually scared myself with a story. My heart almost started racing as I pictured this in my mind the way I was trying to portray it. I hope it does the same for any one else that reads it.

I think this woud be scarier if the girls had been more afraid. I also think you could use a little more description.

Ok…thanks…what in the story do you think needs more description?

I’m giving you 2 more stars for superb editing! :D

Thanks. And thanks for the advice.

Suspenseful, looks like you followed all the good advice you got. the ‘creature’ whatever it is is menacing indeed.

Thanks…I didn’t expect it to end up being so good. I’m happy.

Great cliffhanger. What happened to them? You really did a terrific job with this one. :-)

:) Thnx. We’ll have to see what happened to them in the next sequel.