Wow. This is great.

“In the midst of his pleasing ways” seems stilted to me, but the story itself is great. There’s something off about the first paragraph, but this is the kind of mature rated story I like to see – mature for a reason. I can’t explain better than that.

Keep writing like this, you did good on the humorous holiday challenge too – it’s just evident this is the type of story you have more practice with.

Can’t believe I missed this one the first time around. Chilling and disturbing, especially with the encounter starting positive each time despite her knowledge of where it will go. Thanks for entering the challenge.

LoA