Yea, I know, I’m sick. I’ll seek help one of these days. In the meantime, I’ll write ficlets.

I have no problem with mature content, but I really felt that this story would have been perfectly ended with the 2nd to last line. The one that starts with “She understood”.
It lets the story end on a strange, creepy note and leaves it to the reader whether she actually does understand or whether this monster is just reading in what he wants.
The last line, just doesn’t really do anything for the story at all.

You know… I’ve read several of your ficlets and I’m sorry for not commenting much, but I find your writing to be so… mesmerizing (probably spelled that wrong). I wish I could write like you.

Thanks for the comment, Nat. I personally wish I could write like Clive Barker, but that’s a whole other story. :)

As for iammrwright’s comment, I do agree with you to a degree. The creepy factor would’ve been higher and the ending doesn’t add much, but Phil has become a monster… a real monster. And I wanted the justification to be full as well as the ending to reference back to the ending of the previous ficlet in the chain.

This was very good, I too wish I could write like this.

I’m fairly creeped out, but that doesn’t take much.