There’s an epic run on sentence in the middle of this story. It would read much better if you broke it into smaller sentences. I’d like to read this again after you’ve taken some time to edit.
so is angie following in her mother’s footsteps with this allan guy? or is he just a new big brother?
so is angie following in her mother’s footsteps with this allan guy?
or is he just a new big brother?
Tad Winslow
Mistress Elsha Hawk