I like it! Nice transition from a straight horror to more of an adventure story. :-)

I LOVE IT !!

Thanks guys. I’m extremely excited to be on ficlets…it has really improved my writing skills. Tho it would be nice if ppl would make sequels to my ficlets tho…I think it would make it a lot more interesting…don’t u guys think so?

This is good so far, keep it up!
Some background information about the girls, why they were taking a walk, etc. would build more dimension for your ficlets. : ))

Thanks…I’ll remember that for the next prequel I make.