Interesting first paragraph, really made me wonder how Lance brought Kie into existence, literally or metaphorically perhaps.
You use some killer run-on sentences though. Nothing wrong with a little more punctuation. And for some reason, the second paragraph runs off the side of the page, though I have no idea why it would do that.

I was also wondering if the run off the page line was even your fault, Rowan. It looks to be a freak error. Bazaar. I’m with THX about the puncuation. I like stories that tackle existence though so I like this post and I’m curious to find out where it’s going. very imaginative.

I too, would like to hear more. Keep going!
(It’s not running off the page now :) )