oops…:)

hmmmmm…this series seems kind of fake to me. For example, how would people like someone already if they had only been to the school for one day?
Also, there are some grammatical/spelling/punctuation errors.

I like the suspense at the end of this ficlet, but keep working. :)

Ok yes it does seem a little unlikely but for me its because… I was a new kid and trust me I didn’t make friends that fast but to be honest even though its highly unreal I still like the series and I still think you should continue to write it. It has some quirky sides to it I really really like. so keep writing!

you could like somone that fast it’s called love at first site. I don’t think I’ll be adding to it since i’m such a suckish writer

Stephahknee-
You’re not a suckish writer! You’re learning. Not everything we write is perfect.

I find this series quite intriguing, despite some issues (mentioned above). This ficlet leaves me hanging, and I want to find out what happens next!

Keep writing! And don’t get discouraged! The only way we become better writers is by writing.

Good Luck! :)