OMG . That is soo depressing.
5 Stars!

This is a bit depressing. I like the form of the poem, with the reptition…that’s how I wrtie poetry. I’m interested in your character’s psyche, a little. She’s in a denial/anger/depression stage, obviously…I want to see her progress.

Five stars…for the form.

… Can’t say anything to that.

I like the style of this a lot; it’s an unusual structure. My favorite part is about the “hopeless” wishing he would just go. It may be a bit sad, but its also very deep and thought provoking. Really good :)