good story, lots of spelling mistakes, but still understandable.

I’m sorry. This is going to sound really harsh, but you have no business attempting to create a story until you get a great deal more knowledge and some talent. Your writing is flat. You have numerous misspellings or typos. I don’t care about the characters and you appear incapable of original thought. The only reason I’m continuing to read this is to see just how bad it gets. You can tell yourself that your inability to spell (or proofread) is about being creative, but really it makes you seem uneducated.

concept of the story has potential, needs work on paragraph separation and spelling

well I thought it was good and don’t worry about the spelling