Interesting beginning—but the shift key is on your keyboard for a reason.

don’t be petty

hey i can rate my own stories. that’s hilarious

R_M’s right. The writing is very good, but capitalization will make it quite a bit more readable. Nothing petty about that. :-)

Personally I prefer the text to be color coded. You know I’s done in red, O’s in blue and the vowels below G in green.

In fact doing every other letter in a different color has this wonderful rainbow effect and makes the writing so much prettier, so I’d recommend that too

:)

S.J.

Proper capitalization is not optional if you want your work to be taken seriously. It would be one thing if you were e.e. cummings or “archie and mehitabel,” or otherwise writing in a poetic or experimental form where such things can be forgiven, but you’re not. You’re writing an ordinary story without capital letters

(And Hundak, that’s cute, but I’m not talking about making it look pretty, I’m talking about it being readable at all.)

If your story isn’t easy to read, people will skip it.