The repartee here is spot-on. I could imagine this conversation taking place… up until the last section (blech!). Great twist at the end.

Wait…wait…I think I got it. He’s not her brother?
I loved this.

This is awesome! I love the twist ending.

omg it really is awesome, i didn’t see it coming at all

ah yes hes my brother,hes not my brother.. great story

Great twist. Loved it.

whoa! not her brother.. i’d be pretty spooked if my brother said that all to me.. [[shudder]]

Tune in tomorrow for another exciting episode . . . Sorry, couldn’t resist. It just has “typical teen drama show” all over it.
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Did not see the end coming. Since I have a brother, I’m a bit creeped.

looovvveee this! you should write a sequal

Shocking indeed! What I like best is how the dialog moves back and forth so quickly, speeding the pace and making for an interesting read. Great challenge idea here by uselessness, and this is certainly among the best of the entries. Well done! – Yoda

Wow. Way to throw the reader off. Great!

Excellent twist. Full of creepitude :) The dialogue flowed perfectly too. Nice job!

I like this one a lot. Believable conversation, great twist, and plenty of ewww-factor to keep things interesting. Well done! And thanks for entering my challenge!