umm I’m kinda confused. I can’t tell which persons which because of all the lines switching but I guess thats dialogue! Your plot twist at the end was nice though. I got the basic story.

hey, all I can say is that I tried.

It is difficult to figure out who is talking after the two-thirds mark, but the basic idea gets across and it is a good one. Congrats!

Yes, the speakers are tough to keep track of, without much continuity in the conversation. This story could benefit from a technique used in old radio dramas, that is, to show by telling. Your characters can paint a picture by describing where they are and what is happening. In this case, they should mention what it is people are arriving at (a party?) and the girl being murdered should probably say something about the fork coming at her. Still, great twist! Thanks for entering my challenge!