Hmm, don’t think I understood the ending at all, but the visual sure is nice.

LoA

I’m not particularly surprised – what I’ve posted is a rambling of the skeleton of a larger story I’ve working on elsewhere. Bits and pieces of the larger whole are missing. Thanks for your comments, THS 0477

I’ve edited it again.

Got some feedback from another site, which helped a lot. This is better than it was before, I think….

I hadn’t seen the original version I don’t think, but what I’m reading now is beautifully written. Great job.

Thanks, Ana Cristina – I was pleased with how this turned out, but the other ficlets in this series are kinda “hodge podge” – I need to clean ‘em up! : )