Ooh. I love the way you described death there, and gave the reader an in to your character’s psyche. I think I need a sequel to understand this fully, though. I would if I understood it a little better, but no.

At any rate, awesome job!
LoA

Beautifully written, very vivid. I love it!

Hmm, thought I’d rated it in my last comment. Well, here’s a rating. It’s well deserved.

Aaand it’s not showing my rating. Bum. I gave it a five, incidentally.