I leaned more on alliteration than metaphors, and rhyming just kinda happened—It was unavoidable somehow. Anyway, I hope people see that it is possible and fun even though it’s definately not easy.

This is good. I particularly like how you changed up the alliterations, focusing on different sounds in different phrases.
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I didn’t even realize which challenge it was for and thought it was a great ficlet. The lyrical absurdity fit quite nicely with the described decent from eccentricity to frank madness. And okay, okay, we all know I’m a sucker for psychologically related material.
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Wow…I’m not sure how to respond…I’ve had to read it three times. I also like the different uses of alliteration and rhyme…and it seems like something a schizophrenic would write. I’m not sure I understand it, though. Plus the phrase “rational reason” appears redundant. Isn’t reasoning, by definition, a rational process? But hey, he is schizo, so who cares?

You are correct about being redundant, I remember half thinking about that but forgot to do anythig about it. Thanks for the correction. I don’t want the narrator to come accross as being schizophrenic head case.

is ‘rational reasons’ redundant? the plural form of reason meaning—what led to the outcome of events. Im gonna go with it for now.

I see your point. However, a “reason” that leads to an outcome of events is a logical process and has a rational meaning to the observer. The “reason” I’m writing about this issue is because it is meaningful to all of us (me, too!) to carefully choose the words we use. If a “rational reason” makes sense, then so does an “irrational reason”. But the words “irrational reason” are a little nebulous. My comments are not about the use of the word. I just thought a better word might be used other than “reason”.

An original eccentric character. I laughed at the alliteration, W was a good choice.

Yeah, it is a weak choice of words afterall Mray, thanks for challenging me to write better. I’m dropping the word all together, it’s not needed.