Enter; my other favorite nephew. BTW . I do so love my nephews. And they were perfect for this story. So mischievious, curious and into every thing. After my own heart. ;)

I like this story of two mischievious brothers and want to see more.

Constructive comments:”His mom had brought him early” is a bit confusing—I don’t know to whom “his” and “him” is referring, Brandon or Skyler, and to where he was brought early (until I read a few times to sort it out). And I thought Skyler was on the bus, only to be grabbed by the farmer. What’s a “monster flower thing”? Again the “he” at the end is a bit confusing because of the two boy characters.

Keep going!

Sorry, I do agree that it is confusing while reading. Of course I have the beginning, the end, the middle and the real brothers the story is based on running around wildly in my head while trying to decide what exactly they would do next. Since I have used my character limit on this one, this time we’ll all pretend that I included the last “he” as “Brandon”, being a miniature “Skyler.” ;)

such genteel southern charm. Funny. and your comments are as long as the ficlets LOL .

That’s what makes writing real life events in fiction so difficult-you have everything understood so clearly in your mind that sometimes in the translation to paper small details are skipped and the reader can get confused. Pronouns always get tricky with characters of the same gender! Keep writing! If I didn’t like it, I wouldn’t comment. ;)

Whoops. That wasn’t meant to be crossed out. I used an em dash.

LOL I understood it all perfectly well. They were brothers but I understood that “he” was Brandon because that is who you were talking about! I guess you could have used the “scientific” name for the “monster flower thing” so people who hadn’t read the prequel would know what it was, but not so sure that would have cleared anything up! LOL Most of the time, you guys write totally over my head anyway! But I love to read them. Good job! I can’t wait to see what they get into next.

Crap. I have to get back to work today. I will be trying to pay attention during those boring meetings and my mind will be going over what the brothers are doing at the farm. My notes will not consist of better teaching methods but of monster flowers and small red headed field trippers running amuck. ;) More to come, soon.

Yeah, my comments have gotten out of hand….

Hey, if Ficlets didn’t want long comments, they wouldn’t give you 512 characters! I say if you got ‘em, use ‘em!