Oh my! How interesting!
This didn’t really need to be mature though.

My philosophy is that if any part of the story is, it might as well all be.

You have a point, but you might catch more readers if some of it’s not. More people are reading mature ficlets now though.

whoa didnt see that comeing! lol but i like the whole sister thing buts a nice spin on the story

Nice work! Keep going, make it into a novel >:3

Loving it!!! Abesolutely amazing!