I really like this story. Throw a period after ‘nothing’ in the second to last line and erase ‘I recognized’. or any other variation that works. The story progresses with the action along side it, ”…turning faster and faster until I sat down hard”—good scene, good way to show how frantic she was and then how suddenly the gravity of the situation sunk in. I know you’ll fix the petty editing problems, sooooo 5 stars.

The last bit in your bio about horseback riding cracks me up. lol

Thank you! problem solved.

I agree with Tad Winslow, this is really awesome! I can’t think of anything to say that he didn’t already, so we’ll just leave it at that for now…
LoA