I like it, continues the vein and feel of the original piece, giving a bit more character detail and still leaving it open to possibilities. And nice touch with the death march for the caterpillar battle—hadn’t thought of that.
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The character of Ben is emerging well. Why everyone keeps changing the leads name I do iot know.. is he Billy. Pat or my original Danny(since changed to just no name.. lol)
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Yeah, I concurr with Kermit. I thought the narrator was Billy.

You’re a co-winner! The announcement in full detail is up as a prequel to the starter for the challenge that you came up with, for which you receive a great deal of credit above and beyond the nod for your contribution to the challenge itself.
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