wow crisp dialogue, fast paced, mysterious, awesome.LoA
Extremely witty. I can honestly say I didn’t expect that ending at all. Only thing is, teenage boys can sound quite squeaky, so maybe consider tweaking that part and making her husky voice sound much more believable.
nice, like the ending and the pace. I like this line Walk off into the sunset like a good post-apocalyptic gunslinger.
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♠Ana Cristina♥
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