I hate to say this but I thought you were taking this story in a whole other direction until the ‘my room-mate, the lush’ comment. (Glad you didn’t!!) However, this is too short for me to get a feel for your writing. I like quite a few of the descriptions, though ‘poured through the doorway’ is somewhat cliche.. Take this a bit farther so I can see your mind. Right now it is as though we met at a bar, said ‘Hi’, and you called it a night..
Susan Holder is terrific