I love it. Great descriptions, very evocative! I added a prequel to begin to hint at who our protagonist is and what exactly he or she is doing here…
LoA

Nice, easy flowing description of a simple little moment giving a few clues as to larger events and a bit of the character’s personality.
Loa

Descriptive, witty &love the coffee cream scene and the greasy breakfast,you catured a diner scene so perfectly, just like the coffee before the rotund butted waitress went and ruined it.
LoA