based on a dream

Hey, this looks like a cute start, but I have to say, it felt kind of rushed. My suggestion might be to break it up into two ficlets, so you could have more space to develop the ‘before’ and ‘results’ half.

i’m going to take you’re advice thankies

i’m going to take you’re advice thankies

i’m gonna mark it as a draft

I agree with Kells. The ficlet did feel kind of rushed, and I think you could have added a bit more detail. By the way, “immedeatly” should be spelled as “immediately”. But I do think that this story could go somewhere. :)

A nice beginning to a nice date.