Cool.Only suggestion would be to use some line breaks to make it easier on your readers.
Wow. That’s really awesome. Great viewpoint and very original. 5 stars!
oops forgot to actually GIVE you the stars! silly me!
ok obviously i don’t know what i’m doing cause it showed up twice and i’m probably an idiot for commenting again but oh well. i really LOVED your story!
great dialogue! so sad and so true!
thanks :D
White Hat
Emmyful
Emmyful
Emmyful
Mistress Elsha Hawk
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