Very good! It fits very nicely as a prequel for “They Will Eat Tonight.” I enjoyed the creative style of writing in both stories. Keep up the good work!

Just a hint, starting the next dialog line on a new line helps the reader know who’s talking. :) I think this little story is great!

Just a hint, starting the next dialog line on a new line helps the reader know who’s talking. :) I think this little story is great!

thanks! i just didn’t have room for it lol. or i would have.