Good, though in your 7th line, the words all run together, almost like a run-on sentence. I know it’s a poem, but try separating some of those words or adding commas. That will help the flow of your poem. Otherwise, good alliteration and imagery.
LoA

i agree with Ana – this was beautiful! but i also must agree with the flowingingness of the 7th line. if it were me, i’d seperate it like this:
it was a wonderful, wonderful life,
why did you have to say good bye?