this is very distrubing, and your willingness to speak about such things have me curious as to if you may have some under line issues.

a few grammatical errors, but those can be fixed. and i think you meant to say “grabbed a knife” as opposed to “stabbed a knife.” also the piece seems to lack continuity in some places, like it jumps around. but other than that this piece is very disturbing. not that it’s graphic it’s just a horrid concept for one to grasp. patricide and matricide are a most horrendous crime and it makes me wonder about the writers mind set. but ending brings it to an nice close – it shows the boys’ remorse.

Brutal and disturbing, and still somewhat emotionally detached, which fits with how one might imagine a person becoming both to do something like this and how they would do afterward.
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That he died before the sun light hit seems to contradict the weeks that he kept the heads around. Consider switching one of those points?

remarkabley stomach churning..able..y. if there is such a word. but anyway – i agree with `crayola – it jumps around a lil bit in a few places, and there’s a few spellammar [spelling + grammar] errors, but other than that, this is terribly amusing. =]