Comments on The fire in the apartment complex... by Twitch

Twitch

I am putting the sequel on now…
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

I am putting the sequel on now…
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

sry about double posting… don’t know why that happened!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
THX 0477

Very exciting, and the perfect sort of story to use the present tense for (missed one though, that first verb is past tense). The first two sentences are kind of run-on, and it might work better to break them up a bit, just to throw some constructive stuff out there.
LoA
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

ok… thanks!!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

I fixed the past tense into pre-tense… same with the sequel!!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Qwerty123

Wow this is a great story and Its very exciting☻
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

thnk you ally_!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

thnk you ally_!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

hey!!! Read the Sequels!!!!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.
Twitch

and comment on them please!!!! tee-hee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:27:15.