Aww, sad, but it was sweet.
A little editing needed but other than that very good.

this was sad but in an exciting way. I loved it!

Seriously? He died? That’s like tragic!!!! I thought in fairy tales (that was the assignment for school) it ends in “Happily Ever After”
THE END !
Not “He died…”
But it was pretty catchy, wait, can a story be catchy?

Melis, how could he die. Well at least she got the kiss.

look i said that he died because i don’t believe in “happily ever after”….a “happily ever after” is a story that hasn’t ended yet.