I like this…kept me guessing right ‘til the end. Nice fic.

Wow – I didn’t see where that was going! Excellent ending.

Woah total surprise with the ending.. well written.. very Engaging. you manged to keep it in the present too.. awesome this should win the challenge definately!

I love it! it is about growing old and loosing your innocence and care free feeling. I feel myself loosing it too. I bring it back though because it is fun and makes me feel alive.

Perfectly describes growing up. Very much a suprise ending

It’s going to be hard to pick a winner.. i like this.

this is so true, and well written with very good metaohors.
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wonderful job. It’s a good thing you won’t have to look too far to find you! : ) your still in there..somewhere. meanwhile, I’ve got shovels!!

Thoughtful, insightful, sensitive and engaging – the kind of qualities I’ve come to expect from your writing. Nice work! I like the end.

I love love love the ending. keep writing. and keep me updated with sequels.

favorite line: “running around like a lunatic, though still fun, was no longer acceptable.”

I don’t know what to make of this…I don’t believe you missed you. I think this is written for someone else you are pining for….and if it is, it’s very romantic and beautiful. I mean, in your fouth paragraph there is that implication, when you wrote “when our paths diverge” . Please, write a sequel to this so I can see the light somehow…i’m slow.

Nah, leala1953, I think it’s quite possible that this was written with THX speaking about himself. Or to himself.
I’m only thirteen but I’ve felt like this frequently. You really captured the feeling. Beautifully written.
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I love this! Missing a part of yourself, feeling like you’re lost. So easy to relate to, and a beautiful take on the challenge.
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