Comments on The Tower of Esimed by dolphinlvr92

Throat Wolf

A good start. But please please please leave a blank space between paragraphs. It’s much easier to read and only costs 1 extra character.
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.
THX 0477

Throat Wolf if really on this broken up paragraph kick, but you only have two paragraphs, and they’re separated. Nice job with the imagery. The face in the window wound up a bit sudden at the end, though you probably meant it that way.
LoA
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.
Kermitgorf

dream sequence.. interesting.. I agree about the imagery.

LoA
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.
Throat Wolf

They weren’t when I originally posted about it.
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.
flute faerie

Oooh, I know what’s special about Esimed. Pick me!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.
dolphinlvr92

go ahead, flute faerie, let me know!
- Posted 2009-01-12 03:44:27.