Great last line. He’s a plucky novice naturalist, isn’t he? I’m identifying with him more and more. And Hiawatha is her name? It seems familiar, like it’s one of those infamous Native American names.
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Agree with THX that the last line is well written, in fact I think the entire ficlet is well done. You have a good style that flows well. But … I hope you are planning on taking down the arrogant guy who thinks it was a good pick-up line. In the original, Hiawatha was a man’s name; however, gender ambiguity can always be used in interesting ways.