If it is not in the present tense, please tell me how to fix it. I think it is. This is how I usally write them.
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I dont mind which tense this is in. Its really good. You need to sequel it!

This is good. Don’t worry about the tense, we’ll deal with it later.
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This is good. Don’t worry about the tense, we’ll deal with it later.
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Perfect!
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I think you meant to write Mike and not Mark in the first sentence.
Nice little Blue Lagoon story!
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