There’s a big jump in the story that needs to be explained more, between the being done with guys to making out with Jenn. Did Jenn seduce Kaitlyn or did Kaitlyn go after Jenn. Also you have a POV shift in the middle of this Ficlet. It starts out third person, then becomes first person midway through the telling.
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