Very exciting with some dramatic visuals. But you’ve got a lot of typos that really derail the flow and emotion. Ah, or maybe it’s a language thing. Impressive for it being a second language then!
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Captivating, but I agree with THX about the typos. Thank you so much for entering. It gave me chills still. Such an interesting way of tying the ideas and concepts and objects together. Awesome job!
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