I have a feeling this won’t be flirty or nicenice :)
Great job, I really like the character. Nice job with the present tense, as well- I’m terrible at that.

I love your double use of the phrase ascot ? really? And I look forward to seeing how the next round plays out.

Love this, very…I’m not sure exactly what I’m trying to say here. But vocabulary deficit aside, great story.
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LOVING this mix of the cerebral and the visceral!

Effective use of second person point of view. Good, classic sort of storyline.
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