Whoa, totally wasn’t expecting that last part. I like how the story went from an orange, to hair, to a grenade. That was cool.

Wow, that last paragraph really was a twist! I had begun to imagine something along the lines that she had been kidnapped/imprisoned…what a surprise!

The imagery is wonderful, though – gorgeous descriptions, and the metaphors and all that are fantastic.

I’d love to read some sort of backstory on this =)

Thanks!

Dang, how do you do dashes without it turning into strikethru?

Kells: you could write one….

I liked the quick shift from thoughtful to throwing a grenade with a little stream-of-consciousness transition in the middle.
LoA