Nice twist! Thought this was excellent – great foreshadowing at the beginning leading up to an exciting twist. I love ficlets that can tell a whole story in such a limited space and you pulled it off well!

This is brilliant, absolutely brilliant. I agree with Melia, the foreshadowing is great. And the last line really pulls the whole thing together, without revealing too much. Sequel coming up?

WOW ! Cool! The twist was a very nice touch, exspecially the ending.
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Whoa, awesome concept. The last line was sorta like the icing on the cake.

I had a stray thought about what Satan would do if he went into a confessional. Would he go there to confess or to gloat? The last line was actually the first line I wrote. I just knew I wanted to end it on that note.

The idea of satan in a confessional is fantastic! I can’t help but fear for the priest …

Great concept, and your dialogue is superb.

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