Evocative, but be careful about word choice. Does mist “cuddle”? Or (I apologize if I’m being an ass for this suggestion) does it “caress,” “embrace,” “enfold,” “entwine,” or “envelop”? There’s a famous quote from Mark Twain: “The difference between the almost right word & the right word is… the difference between the lightning bug and the lightning.” If you don’t already know: a thesaurus is one of a writer’s best tools. (Check: http://thesaurus.reference.com/ if you need one online.) Keep writing!

He is sort of right, but it’s still good. The last sentence may need re-worked because it seems too long. Good!

I like it a lot, the imagery is good, I query the tense though, you start out with “the mist descends” and then change tense to “the sun started.” Personally I would have used “the sun starts” to keep the tense through the whole piece

Just to clarify something to the author: I would not have offered my comment if I didn’t think your writing had a strong foundation and showed a great deal of promise. Please keep up the good work.