Eloquent, but never use a hammer where a gentle tap suffices. There is an old axiom in writing about showing instead of simply telling. Your first five sentences convey the feelings a war bride might have, but the rest of the piece betrays a lack of faith in yourself and your audience. Yourself, because you didn’t have faith that you were making your point. Your audience, because you didn’t trust us to empathize with your subject. Write with confidence, and show us (instead of telling us). Good luck!

Nice, I was thinking though you could get more life in it from a first person pov. You have some really nice emotion and imagery but just feels like it’s taking too long to come out because of the perspective.

S.J.

I love this one and it has a great story basis=).

hey, wait a minuet! Women fight in wars too!!

(aunts, nieces,mothers ,grand mothers, sisters…..)

still a great story though