I’m drawn to vampire/werewolf stories, but this didn’t quite do it for me.
While it’s an interesting concept, I found the dialogue a bit hard to follow (“enter” everytime someone else starts speaking), and felt it could have had a bit more depth.
I do plan on following this series, because I want to know what happens.

Yeah I had to write this one really fast cuz i had to leave so i really need to slow down!
hey thanks for your comment though
Whinney

I think it’s great and it keeps me on the edge of my seat wanting to read more… I can’t wait to see where this one goes! Good job!
LoA

I like it write more.

thanx Ally, hey r u done w/ eclipse yet???
Whinney