well this could be taken badly for many people todd. you might want to point out to those few friends that you do like who this was about. good job though

The uneven punctuation is a bit off-putting. In a poem, you can leave the end of a line with either a comma or no punctuation mark. And the whole tone does come across as rather self-important and callous. Your point is basically that you’re too cool to associate with people who bear for you genuine affection, which isn’t exactly an admirable trait. And I think you hurt lena’s feelings.
LoA
btw, thoes should be those