A thoughtful drive with a very back and forth sort of feel to it, past to present to past possible present, happiness to unhappiness. Certainly made me feel for and like the character who is now unsure of…well, everything.
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I enjoyed the use of internal reflections. One thing that writing can do, is bring out those internal thoughts of an individual. Nice piece that can stand on its own, or continue on.

I thought it was good, but not your best effort, Wil.

It reads like more of an airy, open-ended starter and less of a self contained vignette compared to your other ficlets, but the possibilities abound. The perfect time to sequel your own work. : )
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That’s a nice little slice of LA. The hopes and dreams people have about the place – some get dashed while others work out. I like how you tied streets around LA into the story. I feel bad for Gary but man, if Hollywood does that to you I’m glad I stayed up in Monterey :)
I think that something seems missing from the story though. I’m not sure what, but it feels incomplete to me.
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This reads like a synopsis – it’s missing the smooth flow of a narrative, and better pacing is needed, also. I recognize it’s hard to write a story within the confines of the small space we’re given per ficlet, but I think this would work well as a series.
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Nostalgic and full of regret. Great job creating a sympathetic, yet forlorn sad character.

feels very real – hitting a little too close to home for me.

I like it. It got me thinking and, together with the sequel to it, inspired me to add a third installment.

Makes you wonder how many of us are where we thought we would be. Well written, Wil.

It’s a little choppy, Wil, but I like this. I get the feeling that if you cleaned it up / smoothed it out a bit it would read better, but great work as always.. Great to have you here at ficlets.