Your inspiration, your story. Beautiful.

Your story makes the picture very vivid!

Vivid and good use of the imagery. Particularly liked “footsteps spattering the cobblestones”.

I don’t want to appear overly critical but it felt slightly squeezed into shorter form rather than feeling native.

Thanks, Markus

Thank you for the feedback! I tend to be verbose by nature, and I like Ficlets because it forces me to condense my thoughts and get to the point. It’s still a struggle though. Maybe someday I’ll get the hang of it. :-)

Its not always easy to convey vivid imagery in such a short story, and make it interesting, but I think you did a good job here. Seems like it would be good for a sequel too.

But now I want to know more! Wah!