Lovely and intimate telling of a practiced and violent art. I see what you were going for with the lack of punctuation, but I think it could have used writing with clearer demarcations of start and stop to compensate. I couldn’t guess how to do that, but a lot, especially in the first half, wound up hard to follow and confusing because of the style.

yeah, its the letter limit that screwed me up, i can see what ur saying though, and thanks for the insight, ill see if i can fix it