Oh wow… so he’s a Magic Man. I like this – it has an almost meditative quality about it. I’d love to read a continuation, but I think it’s a great stand-alone thing too.

Lovely and varied, from the innocence and dreaminess of youth to a magical, mystical lesson from father to child.
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Elegant and ethereal. Loved it.

Superb, as usual. Your writing flows well, in this case in a very serene and ethereal fashion.

Great story, and congrats on feature-dom!

Congrats on being featured! Slight correction: in your second line, the possessive pronoun “its” doesn’t need an apostrophe.
It’s such a peaceful piece, makes me want to go out and fly a kite myself.
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Your descriptions create stunning and strong visual images as well as a mythical tone. Nicely, nicely done…. sigh

COOOOOOL ! This is so awesome! CONGRATS ON FEATURED !! =D

Thanks for the attention, folks – didn’t expect that & Anna Christina you’re right I do have a problem with it’s and its…. You were right! Thanks! – Yoda

Brilliant, though the crocodile comment seemed slightly out of place. Otherwise, great writing as usual.

Wow – you took a picture quite far. What a flight of imagination – a sunken city and all!

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I kinda don’t get it… Not to say that this isn’t a good story ( I really loved the descriptions and paragraphs 1 and 2 and the descriptions in the other ones)but I didn’t understand how you pulled it all together in the end. I guess I will read the sequel to see if it clears it up for me. Congrats on being featured, by the way!!!! X)