Keep up the good work, james. I think this is a really solid first effort.

If anything I think it starts off stronger than it ends. We get that Steve is distant and duty-bound to walk the dogs, but maybe give us something more than just the repeated “midnight” to sell the whole thing.

Maybe the reaction of Steve or the dogs.

And I’m just making it up as I go along too. Feel free to take my constructive criticism w/ a grain of salt.

yeah, i hear what you are saying. i had more at the end but i ran out of characters that i was allowed to use. that is the hardest part of this…

ya i always have issues with running out of characters too. Next time, if u want to add a sentence, go back and take out the spaces between the period and the next character. That’s what I always end up doing.

I think it’s a cool idea,and the beginning reads great, but i dont really get whats so sinister about the word midnight.

nothing really. but this actually happened to me the day before and it seemed rather strange and like a good plot for a story.

i think we actually have somewhere it is gong to go though