Nicely written with a sort of ‘je ne sais quois’ feel to it. I can’t put my finger on the descriptions. They’re out there which is both magical and off-putting. It makes me think of a loosely done cartoon with lots of abstract, swirling colors to represent emotions and stuff.

Gee thanks THX 0477 . It’s good to get some feedback to what you’re putting out there. Makes you feel like there is some sense to the shouting.

“Magical and offputting”…hmm. Shall have to have a think about that one.

:)

Well, I quite liked this. There is some startling imagery here, especially the line Finally, he gets into the car and honks as he drives by, swallowed by the buttocks of traffic. I had a chuckle reading that.
Call me crazy, but I like language that makes me read it twice. :p
LoA