Interesting. A very well described scene, to the last detail. I’m interested to see how it fits in with your prequel… which had a decidedly different, more foreboding tone.
And the character depth deepens. The enchanting thoughts of a person who can find enjoyment in his work. Very nice to read from the previous ficlet to this one. The density of the narration is being lifted word by word and thus revealing more as it goes. I’m just admiring, don’t mind me…
I am loving the contrast in characters already. Have a feeling a great conflict awaits, and I do love conflict. :) At least, when I get to watch from the outside, don’t care so much being in the thick of it. Wonderfully thoroughly constructed characters! Absolutely marvelous!
I like the writing here a lot, especially lines like “his vested chest.” This writing reminds me a little bit of Faulkner, that same languorous and deliberate pacing.
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